Peer Review #1

TANIELA BOLAIRA

Taniela’s blog is available at: https://tanielabolaira.home.blog/blog-feed/

The blog looks visually appealing, with a clean cut and professional appearance, it is easy to navigate. Though this blog is not categorised as ‘Australian Literature,’ blogs may become difficult to identify in the future when more posts are added to the site.

The writing, itself, is very imaginative and is clearly a recollection of a personal experience. Your creative use of vibrant words to describe the landscape within the second paragraph creates a sense of visual imagery that draws the audience into the scene. I personally feel as though you try to include poetic elements within the work in an attempt to heighten the mystery of the landscape and your personal connection to it, “Surrounded by a high stern coconut tree, one that would make a fool of me.” This personally seems unsuccessful as the line seems to come from nowhere and has little to no connection with the lines surrounding it. Further, heavy editing is needed as the grammatic irregularities and punctuation within the work impacts the flow of speech, and negatively effects the audiences’ ability to read and understand the blog as a cohesive literary work.

Ultimately, I personally think this was a great effort, with real creative promise.